avatar help?

[tamlin_kitsune]

okay - group huddle.  Since most everyone I'm hooked up with here is either an author and/or a reader/reviewer that I respect I need some opinions (okay, I need LOTS of opinions).

Is Cloud out of character in avatar?

granted, I know he's not 'really' Cloud and he's playing the role a bit *cough*lots*cough* more aggressively than I should probably make him but, especially in chapter 2, is his core 'Cloud' or not?  I need some solid assessment - pros, cons, stuff like that?  And, if he's horribly off, is it something fixable or should I scrap and start over?  I know there's not much at this point to go on because he's playing things close to the vest - I guess what I'm asking is - does he feel right (as silly as that may sound)?  If I put a different name on him, would he still be recognizably Cloud?

Comments

[knit-lace.livejournal.com]

This is during the time where Cloud is an cocky asshole so I think your characterization is pretty Close. Especially when he said "Fuck that". It's something I can see if say. And Cloud was flirtatious to Tifa with his 'next to you comment' so I can see him acting like he did in chapter 1. But if you're going for the real Cloud playing the avatar Cloud than the avatar should be more reserve. At this point in your story, we don't know the personality of the person controlling the Cloud's avatar, so I think you have more leeway.