avatar help?

[tamlin_kitsune]

okay - group huddle.  Since most everyone I'm hooked up with here is either an author and/or a reader/reviewer that I respect I need some opinions (okay, I need LOTS of opinions).

Is Cloud out of character in avatar?

granted, I know he's not 'really' Cloud and he's playing the role a bit *cough*lots*cough* more aggressively than I should probably make him but, especially in chapter 2, is his core 'Cloud' or not?  I need some solid assessment - pros, cons, stuff like that?  And, if he's horribly off, is it something fixable or should I scrap and start over?  I know there's not much at this point to go on because he's playing things close to the vest - I guess what I'm asking is - does he feel right (as silly as that may sound)?  If I put a different name on him, would he still be recognizably Cloud?

Comments

[the-tower-room.livejournal.com]

I say he's already perfect. He's a wonderful mixture of that arrogant jerk who's only really acting out from the game with the added bonus of being more aggressive towards wanting Tifa. And he's an avatar, and that reviewer is aware anyway that actor!Cloud isn't really Cloud, just someone portraying him in the game, and you've also very clearly stated that "Avatar" is AU. S/he is free not to read further if it makes him/her squeamish, and you're also not obligated to that reviewer to change how you characterize Cloud in this story.
Write him as the story dictates or however makes you happy.